Cool, I like it!! I'm going to update my stories soon, so keep a look out!

Well, I love the story,
BUT, you do have a tendancy to switch person which is unsettling and you sometimes write in present tense, Im sure any english teacher would kill you for that. But I like the story and I wanna hear the rest...

Well well well, I am fair impressed. Congradulations. I must say though, I think your transition from her to I, caught me off guard, so next time please leave a warning like *'s or something.

Cool!
Angel reminds me of, well, ME!
Write more!
I wanna hear more about Myself!
Hmm... Only thing is you need to grab the readers interest faster and stronger.
If I weren't as nosy as I am(and fond of the character!) I wouldn't have been interested without the second chapter, which I wouldn't have read, most likely.
You have good ideas, it's just putting them accross in an appeaking manner...
Keep it up and Improve!

For the love of the english language, spellcheck. Every word processing program has one. Also - this is a fanfic site, not an SMS or messenger, so don't speak in netspeak, it's demeaning to your readers.

Description is a good thing - lists of actions do not make a compelling narrative. "He did this. Then he did this. Then he did something else. Then he said something. They went and ate pie." really isn't very interesting to read - your job as an author is to draw the reader into the story, create characters they can believe in and a world for the story to happen in - with fanfic that is half done for you: you've already got a world and characters, all you have to do is work with them and put them appropriately into your story.