Uh… OOC galore?

But that was the point. Ah! It was shonen ai! You wrote shonen ai!

You made my Yuki kiss Kyou! Hidoi hidoi! Wah.

But it was okay, but it seemed as if everything just happened all at once.

~hitokiri-tomoe

Too fast.

‘She stole his first kiss before rushing out. Kyou blushed, surprised.’

Not even a bit of drama.

But the first part was a bit too heavy. And Kyou sounds too casual.

~hitokiri-tomoe

I'm trying to figure out the title, but so far it's interesting, though Yuki has poor friends.

GO KAGURA! I"M ROOTING FOR YOU!@ YES YES SOMEDAY YOUR EFFORTS *WILL* GET YOU KYO'S LOVE! IT BETTER OR I"LL BE SO MAD AT KYO!

very nice start, cute (and I'm not a person who uses that word alot *gags*) but not overly fluffy to the point of giving me a head ache. I really hope you update soon!

Aw, that's so sweet! I usually ship Kyou with Tohru, but this was really good! The way you used Kyo in this one was very well done and very in character. I can't wait to read more of these little Kyo pieces!

Cute first chapter. I liked it. Please continue. I WUV KYO & KAGURA!