darkmoon knight was not kidding when he said you are a very talented author this story is good i shall recomend it to my friends

Awzome Fanfic Christy. I love it. Keep up the great work hun!

well since you are allready writing a sequal there is no need to vote so im just going to say congrats on finishing such a great story and i will be reading the sequal =)

Whoo, topaz! *huggles it*

Good story idea, but you should have probably split this chapter into several. Blocks of text and a lot of scrolling throw most people off. I know that you wanted thirteen chapters, but sometimes you have to sacrifice things or leave things out. The whole bit on Cri's birthday didn't seem essential to the story at all.

Also, sorry, but you should consider going back through this and correcting grammar and such. I could help you, if you'd like.

YAY, a Vraal! *dances*

So far, I've seen a LOT of grammatical errors, and you're on a joyride with your tenses. Yeah.

Okay, this is looking to be all right.

I have other things to do, but I saw Deltora Quest listed up there...

Oh, yeah. I love Deltora.

Morrigan and Lillith. Goddess of death and war and the demon/vampire queen? Nice choice of friends!

Yes...returning to this chapter...

This is SO Eragon, especially the blade-blocking thingy.

SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!

Anyhoo...

Raven's real name is NOT Metrion, it's RAVEN. Somebody started a story naming her Metrion, but that's not in accordance w/ the comics.

So...

SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!

Gasp! You killed her off!

Or DID you?

Hm...

One thingy here is REALLY annoying me: You keep putting "defiantly" instead of "definitely". Use CTRL-F on MS-Word, click on the Find and Replace tab and enter it in. PLEASE.

That chapter was GREAT. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in a while but I've been busy beyond belief. I asked if she was a vampire before, though...

Did you get the "slightly pointed ears, though not as prominent as an elf's" part from ERAGON?

E! i enjoyed this story. especially chapter 13. it was a very well written climax.

dude update great plot

rad...cri = hot...2 thumbs up...loved the killing parts

is this the end of the story? i need to know!