This is so old, you may not care to get a review on it. But I started browsing Naruto fanfiction starting with the last page and stumbled across this. This is the first oneshot/story/anything I've read of Naruto although I've read the manga and watched the show. You seem to have the opinion, judging by your A/N's, that this one-shot isn't any good. I'm here to divest you of that opinion. One by one I've gone through a page and a half of fanfictions--I opened and closed them without reading more than a couple of paragraphs. They're still searing with my mental "YOU FAIL!" brandings at the moment (I didn't review to tell them that or anything xD). HOWEVER, your story caught my interest from the first sentence. You know how to begin a short story. Kudos to you. Sure, it's pretty simple. But simple's good. I think you caught the personalities of the characters very well. I just don't see why you hated this so much when you wrote it. It isn't bad. xD In fact, I'm going to check and see what else you've written now. ^^

That was a cool fic.
Hinata is such a nice person, she is one of my favourite characters.
I hope that you will have a good day!

How beautiful. :D All I could really pay attention to was the way Hinata saw his blue eyes. Now it makes me incorporate blue and believing together. Weird.

Butyeah. I've always thought Hinata (as well as Iruka) were really the first who've believed in that blonde. Makes them special in my judgement. xD Great job.

it maed sense to me. i liked how hinata couldn't laugh at him and her father never laughed at anything.

hands down, this is one of the best stories on the site. period.

This was actually one of the better one-shots I have read. I'm also glad you used the right spelling for blond (boys can't be blondes; only girls can).

That was very good.

I like it. The characterization, the subtlety. How Hinata and her father were the only ones who didn't laugh, and the reasons why. You did really well!

Well, I thought it was an excellent little slice of life fic, and perfectly encapsulates everything Hinata loves about Naruto!

I'm still hoping he changes his mind...^_^

It's cute...
I don't know how to make it better... In fact, I don't see any problems! Maybe a little more development of Hinata's family spirit, and why Naruto is so inhabitual an extraordinary linked to that? Really, I don't know.

You don't think it's very good, but I think you got the message across regardless. I love Hinata ^^ and that very last line was just perfect.

Bah, I liked it alot ^^

Personally, I think this has a lot of strength. This is just the kind of scene I could imagine to spark Hinata's feelings for Naruto. Maybe you think you didn't ornate it enough, given your author note, but I believe it'd be excesive if you added more.

Great job. ^_^ At least Hinata was the only one to see Naruto for who he really is. ^_^ Too bad she didn't tell him that. Keep up the great job~! I really wish this wasn't a one shot.