Gah ><
It was good ^^
Need more ...fanfiction is like a drug o.o
Wow. Uh...I seem kinda weird now.
Well anyways it was good a please update soon-ish ^^;

hey, cool fic! but one thing- i think u CAN say they hung themselves...

It is very well rounded in the parts of a story. *has been yelled at too many times by her english teachers* um...yeah, well in stead of saying hanged, you could say hung...wait...or you could say 'because I don't like the word hanged I shall say the person used a piece of rope and tied it from a very high place and made a noose. The person then did the only logical thing to do after you do all that hard work. They put it around their throat then jumped off of a support...just like dracula did in dracula 20.' or you could just ignore my thoughts and do something different. Like complain the whole time you use that saying but still use the saying.

Very nice. It must've been ** Sousuke to realize Ami had hanged herself. No wonder he acts so weird, must've been traumatized. Keep it up.

Let me start off by saying I don't like angst - I'd rather take comedy any day. Let me now clarify by saying I like what you've done so far - it provides a plausible reason for Sousuke's 'denseness' beyond the simple "He's dense" explanation. Please keep up the superb writing.

[eyes begin to water] Poor nameless redheaded Whispered Girl. This story is so tragic, but I love it. Keep up the good work. [sniffle] And she was so young...

Pretty good so far. It is also rather original. This premise sets the story up for having a lot of potential to be a good story. I like the idea of Sousuke being with that no-name Whispered before he was with Kaname; it certainly makes the story more interesting. I have to admit: I never would have thought of that. My only fara, is that the events, not the story, are short. There should be just a little bit more detail into the physical and emotional aspects. In my opinion, description is paramount to a story. Also, it may be alright, but I think your paragraphs are a little bit too spaced out. I would only recommend double-spacing between paragraphs, but that is just me. This is very good. I hope you update soon. Keep up the good work.

Enjoy + Review! ^_^