This is very cool and very sad - I loved your idea. Seeing the Lioness cry really would be mind-altering

yeah . . . really depressing . . . and kinda creepy . . . BUT COOL!!

wow thats really good! you impressed me! I will have to look at some of your other stuff (btw if u still havent read tc it is really good!)

keep on smilin'

t.j.

it's very sweet. i love this. so angsty.

i realy loved your story and even though i dont remember that line your story is sertainly in character

Wow! Provocative plot. :) I love your theme and title. However, I suggest re-wording some of your phrases, looking over your grammar, and perhaps changing some words, to produce a better effect. For example - "I was a little bit happy to hear that, because from what I understand, they have the same kind of magic that I do where they can talk to animals, and I was so scared when I couldn't feel anything. " A bit long, neh? This breaks into the flow and drama of the story. Also, vague words can also lessen the mood of the story. "It was the Lioness, who apparantly didn't want to be seen." I suggest taking out words like 'apparantly', 'like', etc. for the are vague and meaningless. :) On the whole, a lovely, well thought out story.

That was so sad I love it! There acualy is a story about if whats her name was able to beat the rest of the gods. I wrote a sad fic too but its about if Numair died and ya, go read I'd love to know what you think of it. "Day of death"

byt the way the title is great great

That's teribly tragic. and it didn't help that i'm listining to ' you will be my ain true love'. It's got a sad melody. Oh man , i think im gunna cry. That's a sad thought. and know i'm thinking of the charators in my story dieing. you suck...in a very good way. you made me feel really bad...i like it though. Ah...George died. I just thought of that. How...no...*whispers* Georgie...

Un-canonical? Nah, don't think so. Sad, yes. Depressing, possibly. But very well-written, and for that I thank you. I love the way you tell this story not from Alanna's point of view, or Kel's, or some other major character, but from that of a girl who's just another face in the crowd, just another little girl of the Rogue. I also like how the world didn't just suddenly erupt into Chaos, but it was slow . . . the animals, then the Gifted people, and just a slow progression. I like the way you described the Queen of Chaos's attitude about them, nothing more than pests - because I think that's accurate. They're just not significant to her.

What I would have liked that you didn't have, really, is more. I think it would have been even better if you'd provided more detail and the like, because it just seemed too short to me. (Hypocritical, of course, but I'm attempting CC here!)

All in all, it was good, and I'd absolutely adore some more Tamora Pierce stuff from you in the future. Thanks a lot!

~Lilacs

I lovelovelove this story! Beautifully written and despite the - *very* depressing - theme, it nonetheless had a provoking, powerful edge.
I'm very taken with the idea of Alanna's role been measured against the outcome of humanity. The child seeing the great heroin cry has seen that there is no hope for future Tortall.
Very bleak, but very well written.
Well done, and please keep on writing.

I really like all you've done with this story. It's very well-written, and un-canonical though it may be, you've done a good job in making it seem realistic. Although I doubt Tamora Pierce would choose to write about such a subject, you've written this so well that it hardly matters. I especially like the things from the books that you've incorporated into the story- wild magic, the rogue, the animals gods, Uusoae. Although they're all mostly unrelated, you've done a good job bringing them all together here. Great story!