Very good story! I think Ivanova was slightly OOC at the end, but then again, thats me :) Very good story! I loved it! can't wait for the squeal ! KEEP WRITING!

Great Story looking foward to the sequel

Very goooddd.. Please keep going and hurry!

Well done. I like the idea of Marcus and Susan waking up in the same bed, that was cute. But I don't think Susan would be so calm. She would either bite Marcus' head off, or tease him horribly from now on. Either way, good work.

great part, hurry up I need more.

Much better. Keep going.

Good, but could you include more parts with Ivanova? please?

Interesting beginning. I'd like to read where you're going to take this. I think you did well with the characters. You really need a beta for your spelling, though. I couldn't figure out some of your sentences. "glazing at the rich yellow look before looking back at him." makes no sense at all. But, for the most part, your story is good. Keep writing!

Great story I loved it the Chariterization is good.

OH! This is good. Be careful though, Susan never lets people in easily. Especially marcus.. Even though we all wish she had. *sigh* Good plot so far, keep going, I would like to see how this panns out.