Holy crap, that was dark! But, I really liked it! I really like stories that involve Malon a lot because she's one of my favorite characters too. Could you write something about Link coming back from the Spirit Temple? It would be interesting.

aww...i wanted to hear links side of the story. oh well i loved your story.

so sad. : (

Ohh, thanks, Candy...I really liked that one!

eeeep...dark but well written. I'm glad that you've showed that there's more tp malon than meets the evil. *shudder* the scary part is, things like that happen in real life alot. i think i'll go read "sporradicaly evil sponges" now, or something humorous, or mushy... but good work. Just a little dark though- but that is what you said..

O_o Holy crap that was dark, gotta go read Super Smash Bros. humor, or Outlaw Star... the story makes me want to go kick Ingo's sorry ass, but since I can't, I'll hex him, 'Petrificus Totalus!' wait a minute, thats the full body-bind, my mistake... Pretty good story though...

*applauds* Very well-written, an awesome concept! The game doesn't really show much about Malon's true feelings, but that's what imagination is for :) I've always felt like she was a very deep character w/ a sorta shrouded storyline. But I like mysterious characters.

A rather intriguing look into the minds of the true Zelda characters. It's always a wonder as to what humiliating and debilitating experiences Malon went through while under Ingo's rule, and I think you may have buttoned it down (excuse the epression) rightly so. Don't be so distressed when you integrate something dark into your work; dark fics are usually more truthful in a realistic sense. However, back to criticism. You need to use more detail in your work, and at times, though I can understand the fic is someone's thoughts, the flow of sentence structure needs to improve. It's very confusing at times when you try to follow the route her thoughts are taking. Go back over it with the eye of a reader (as in someone who doesn't know what you were trying to say) and you'll see what I mean. Also, you need to watch your grammar and spelling just a bit. A wonderful fic; you just need a little work.

Oh dear. o_o; That was peculiar. Ah well. :P Makes me respect Malon more, anyhow.

disgusting! uhhh...please, PLEASE, write nicer stories!

man that was dark i mean i have read some dark stories but that was dark

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(Sorry, I forgot to add it to my favs! Love this fic.)

I like the way you write. You remind me of myself when I write (although I don't always write about that kind of stuff _) I hate it when people pass Malon off as a ditz. I mean, when I was playing the game for the first time, it never occurred to me that she was a ditz, or that she was shallow. _ I've always thought there was more to her than meets the eye. And even though she does laugh a lot, that doesn't mean she's a ditz. Maybe she just liked to flirt with cute little 10 year old boys in green hats! _ I know I would!

That was good...VERY dark... _

Oh wow...that was really good. It's true, people usually do look at Malon as such a happy person. And I never really did think about what must have been going on between Ingo and Malon when Talon left...very well done. I thouroughly enjoyed it.