I DID LIKE THE STORY: WHERE IS MARGUERITE AND WHY IS SHE NOT WITH ROXTON? ALSO TO MUCH FIN FOR ME.LOVE M/R

Well, I'm waiting for the next chapter. You did promise more Finn, and I like Veronica, too.

Please have it end well.

Gemini Eplorer

Were is marguerite? What happen ? and is she with roxton?

I just finished the Fic, to date. Does need more careful proofreading. Misspelling, that sort of thing.

I hope that you will finish the tale. I know that it
is hard to get reviews, which is why I'm writing this one. As a writer, myself, I know that being read is important to you.

Avalon seems rather like a version of Heaven, eh?

I'll check in later, to see if you've written more. And I want to see what Finn's wearing. And how this all ends!

Gemini Explorer

I'm not sure where this is headed, but want them all to be safe, and together.

I love Fics that include Finn. Too few writers include her, and most of them trivialize her and treat her as a siily child. (She was 22 on the show.)

I see that she's still using her crossbow here. In my own Fics (not on this board), she has acquired guns, from other expeditions, like the one in the episode, "Suspicion".

I see no logical reason why Finnykins would not have gotten a gun, except that the TV show always presented her as a one-dimensional cartoon character, in some ways.

In the sentence where Vee, Finn, and Ned "had ran" all the way back to the Treeouse, correct that. They had "run", not ran. Proofread more carefully.

Otherwise, a pretty good story, so far. Again, thanks for including Finn.

Gemini Explorer

Please keep writing. This is getting really good

I'm still here. ;D BEHOLD! A plot! lol. Not that there wasn't one already. A Malone shippy is plot enough. :D Now things are getting interesting though.

LOL. love the phrases used. "Ray?"..."Present!" lol. Could I use that it a future fic of mine? ;D Especially liked "...I just got some reality kicked back into my pants." Oh yeah! We all know what that feels. & it comes in many shapes. Mostly it's the sound of an alarm clock at 6 am. LOL

Anyway, fantastic chapter. Hope you won't forget us too long.

~Pearlana~

oh! please continue! I'm enjoying this!

I love were this story is going!! Please finish!! I would love to see a big fight break out between Veronica and Malone in the rain and then have all their unsaid feeling and emotions for each other come out.

Let me shut up I am getting to carried away. I'm a huge V/N fan.

Excellent writing though.

KEEP WRITING! I LOVE THE COMPLEX RELATIONSHIP OF VERONICA AND MALONE. THERE'S IS ALMOST AS COMPLEX AS ROXTON AND MARGUERITES. PLEASE UNDATE SOON AND KEEP IT COMING!

Good so far.. but what happened to M&R!

Great story and interesting plot. Please continue to write. I like how complicated Malones and Veronicas relationship is. It give you so many ways to write. Hope I don't sound like an idiot but I think a good arguement between those two would really spice things up. Just a thought and nothing more. Please continue to write and finish this story.

well, well, look's like we need an update SOON! :p This story is off the hook!

Give me a C. C! Give me an O. O! Give me an...too long to spell it out. CONTINUE!

I SO LOVE THIS!! After i finish all of my in-progress fictions, i plan to write a Lost world fic...

Great stuff...update soon please!!

~Fox of the Nova~

I hope the next one is soon too! :D

Anyways, great chapter! Now what is this about Malone and her ex-boyfriend looking alike, coincidence maybe? Hm...

Anyways, hopefully this incident is just a way to get these two to kick themselves for keeping quiet and get their relationship up and running! But for now, it makes for good drama and a good story! ;) Update soon please, this is interesting and it's getting good. I want to see more!