I liked it, however, you need to read "Captive To Evil" it has this scene. And watch your punctuation! Organa not Ornga. I'm going to assume that's a typo though. All in all though good job!

Interesting story. You need to proof-read.

The premise is sound, but the mechanics need work.

I liked the ideas, but it's hard to read when

one's eyes trip on every error.

"Organa" not "Oranga." Please write

in complete sentences.

I'll take off the English teacher hat.

I love the last couple of lines.

Luke having trouble adjusting to

the changes in his life is also well-done.

Good story! I love these in-between scenes you do ...

This was great. Han was behaving like himself-cocky and stubborn but with a heart. And Leia was great. You can see the very beginnings of that great tension that they have in ESB.

Cute story. :) I like the Han and Leia interaction. It would really help to put it all in the past tense consistently though - the story will flow much better. It's a nice idea for a story.

Very cute! I liked it. One thing, I'm not criticizing this to be mean, but you have a grammmatical error that's kinda something that you might want to change... but I won't say it here, so you can email me if you want to at and I'll tell you. But the cute dialogue and character depiction were great. I'm gonna go read some more now :)

Great story, Candie. Very ... uh ... interesting. well, i didn't see the first movie so technically i got no clue what ur talking about.

Oh, for god's sake, please work on your grammar. The kid's got testes? A life debut? Ever heard of a spell check?

Oh, one more thing, Julia-it's Leia 'Organa,' not 'Oranga.' Just thought I'd mention that. ;-)

It was really good. I always enjoy a story where Han and Leia banter. Watch the punctuation. That's my only advice. It distracted me away from the story just a bit.

This was good. I liked it. Even though I wish Han had gotten with Bria instead...still a good fic.

Very cute, I like dit :)

great!

Really cute. I enjoyed the humor and the insight into Han's mind. But be sure to watch your tenses. You started out in present tense and abruptly switched to past. That's one thing that aggrivates me. Also, I noticed many punctuation errors that became particularly distracting. I'm not trying to be mean-just helpful. With a little more practice, you could be really good. ;-)

Not bad, but you have made a few errors with punctuation and comma-use, and "They do all the people that gave their lives" sounds a bit strange in my ears.