Loved this fic! So many funny moments, brilliant plot with such a sad heartfelt ending ( Well done!

5 stars

Actually, despite your claim of how horrible this was, there's nothing drastically wrong with Chapter 1. (If you got rid of the 'fourth wall' violations, Chapter 2 would be acceptable as well.)

Believe me, I've seen much worse.

Good suspense and alternative story. I must this is very orginal. Although, it's hurting my eyes to read with too many bold letters. I'm sorry, I didn't mean to whim about this.

Just loved it make more...l0l

Pikachu's eyes glowed bright red!

I know yout hate pika' chu but don't express it like that.

" What is it? "

Again do you have to make Ash out to be a TOLTAL pea brain?

the Toilet Zone…

I toltaly do not get that joke.

Looks like Ash's world was just atomized.(Misty leaving him)

It's fresh, it's original...but um...it confused me...especially when they were arguing about who is Jessi and Jessi2...OK I know I am dumb...but did anyone else have a bit of trouble? I like the idea, it's really good...but I don't think I'll read the next one...becuase there are times when I just get lost...I know I should actually use the unerdworked muscle that is my brain to work out this most simple of problems...but is Tuesday. My first day back at school again. After Maths. My brain hurts. 8/10

A great conclusion to an even better story. I salute you!

Wonderful, as usual. If it weren't for you and Douglas Adams I would have no hope at all for Brits. Well, actually, that's not true. I still think that England is a figment of everyone's imagination and that it doesn't actually exist. Sure, Ireland's there, Scotland's there, we're not sure about Wales, but England? Nope, no such thing.

Nice story and a good plot! I have to go and read the second part now! It got a little confusing in the end though! I figured it out though!

Well, interesting story idea (from what I read) I've been skimming things all day for my girlfriend since she's had some people copying her fics and it looks like this has a "similar" idea to her alternate possiblities, which she started over a year ago... Might it be you ripped her idea?

That was sad. *sniff* Well, you'd better continue!

Woah. That was awesome!

That was so sad! ::sniffle:: I never cry, but I came pretty close for this one. I loved it! I really hope you keep writing.

CoOoOoOol! I knew Brock was messed up!