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| yaoi-princess 2006-01-10 ch 1, anon. | abusegah... @.@ wow...awesome i lurved it ^^ |
| 0ri 2005-10-31 ch 1,  | abusenah, you shouldn't raise the rating, it's not that dirty. really quite different, but good. i enjoyed it very much. |
| Cherushii 2005-10-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseNah keep the rating. Its fine. Cool story. |
| ffpanda 2005-09-13 ch 1, | abuseThat was VERY good!! |
| I have a stupid name 2005-07-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey this is a great story... I just love how you knew what it is like inside someones head. I love that Yuki is not all that mean |
| Maryann Chavez Salazar 2004-11-05 ch 1, anon. | abusei really like this fanfic it is one of my most favorits. i really like it cause it gets deep and personla...and poeple really do feel that way *-*(saposed to be a smile) |
| Hiei449 2004-08-10 ch 1, | abusedude! wicked awsome!! this is so going on my favs list |
| Aoi Umi 2004-08-06 ch 1, | abuse*Sniffles* Wow, that was very moving. Good pacing, effective use of second-person POV, and realistic raw emotions...my only problem with it is that sometimes the use of incorrect homonyms causes confusion. For example, there is really no excuse for confusing "threw" with "through." You might want to read over this again and make some spelling changes. But other than that, I have to say that I really, really enjoyed this. I think it works well as a one-shot; it gets its point across quite nicely, and adding anything would be meaningless. Good work! |
| theTigersFire 2004-08-03 ch 1, | abusePLEASE WRITE MORE THANKS |
| Bruja-Boricua 2004-07-27 ch 1, | abuseARE YOU CRAZY! WHAT THE HELL DID YOU STOP? YOU BAKA! YOU STUPID BRAT! |
| Soul of Insanity 2004-07-26 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was good. Very different approach to writing but it definitely works with this story. Great job. |
| Ang 2004-07-26 ch 1, anon. | abusewhoa, good story. Too bad you so obviously said it's a one shot, or I would try and persuade you to write more. I think it might, shoulda, probably been in pg-13, but hey--whatever. Good story...wish you would write more. But it's your life. Eh... |
| Redex 2004-07-26 ch 1, | abuseAlthough a little confuzing and broken at times, as you predicted, this is definitely a good piece, and original. A good way of looking at why Suichi goes back time and again to Yuki, or at least a new one. And not one of those mushy angst-fests. Which is also good. Perhaps a bit short, but who am I to crisitize there? Also, seeing someone actually using second person is different. More people should try it, including me. Good work, keep it up! Red |
| Ellechan 2004-07-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really enjoyed that! Awesome writing technique! It's rare that I've come across amazing stories written from a second person perspective. |