This is indeed so deep! I loved it! Maybe the depression I'm going through helped me understand the feelings here...

That was dark, insightful oh and...bloody brilliant! I loved it! That was so well written and just...brilliant! x

This is...wow...I love it
You perhas should have set it in a poem format, but other than that it's perfect, you really bring across what he's feeling

It's quite good, but the swearing doesn't ring true somehow. I'm all for strong language, but, have you noticed, that none of the LOK characters ever use any form of '**' or the word '**', despite the monstrous amounts of ** ** they're put through?

Just a thought. I don't think you need to lay it out like a poem, it works well this way.

Marvelously done. The only thing I'd change is the format--seems like it should be set up more like a poem, but that's just me. It reflects probably closer to what Raziel actually felt as he fell. I love it--very good job.