I just couldn't ignore your summary, and I must say I'm glad that I didn't.

As much as the angst and depth got me, I have to start by saying that I love the morbid humor of the piece. It sounds like Otogi, but not a part of Otogi that we know- or know well. You've managed to flesh him out and look at another part of him without actually changing him.

The mixed referrences sort of thre me, but they worked well enough in the end. A few few places read a tad roughly, but worked overall. It actually sort of helped because depressoin and deep contemplation and the like aren't all eloquence and perfectly sculpted sentences. Especially because it's been written in first person, it made Otogi feel more human.

I simply love the closing. It made my eyes light up when I read it and I found myself grinning and even sighing in amusement and agreement. Way to tell it

This was a real good one-shot. His view on luck was unique. I am glad you wrote this.

Yes...I read this...months ago, it seems, and yet was searching for time to just leave a review. Naturally, you'll get one with the backdrop of a fading thunderstorm. It seems fitting...

Mamono recommened this to me after I told her of an incident regarding a statment of luck that set me off. I connected to Otogi immediatly when I read this--something that had yet to happen.

Luck... I just know how that feels. Knowing the work one really puts into their life, and how dare someone else just come along and brush it off as being so simple as luck. It gets to me how in character it sounds, as well. Just wonderfully done. I could picture him speaking through this, finally understood some of his thoughts.

And Heaven only knows how I managed to babble this much on a one-shot. I'll be going now before I continue. Hmm, but before I do, I think it's a shame more people haven't reviewed this.

Yes! A story that doesn't suck! Seriously, great job. Wording is a bit awkward in a couple of spots, but nothing to deter from the flow of the story. Canon is slightly mixed, with references to anime (Pegasus) and to manga (scary clown dad).

What really shines are the dimensions you've added to Otogi. You've done an excellent job of fleshing him out by explaining his motivations. He still maintains the old arrogance, but a bit jaded and cynical now. I really like how you handled his view on luck. One'd think he'd place high value on it, but you provide a very logical reason why he wouldn't.

Good job!

^^ Ha, so you're posting challenges too? ^^ Go you! This one is great - you know it. I feel bad for Otogi, but the chacterization was awesome. Great.