This was a good, solid one-parter. It had the right tone: that lonely, introspective, self-reproving loneliness. It would make sense that Rory would feel so stupid after getting emotionally involved with a guy who was married. It was just like Lorelai said.

I agree with the reviewer who said that the last line wasn't quite worded right. Even if there wasn't that strange shift, the sentence structure was off. Still, if a little word order is my biggest concern, you did pretty damned good. Keep up the good work. Thanks. O:)

"After all, mistakes are the building blocks of life, she reminds herself."

While I loved this line I'm not sure it fit entirely well because at the end she seems to perk up...like what she did wasn't wrong.

But that's the only thing I felt was wrong. I loved this story. It was short but very good. I'm amazed this is the first time you've written angst...because you're very talented at it.

Again, wonderful story and I loved basically all of it, just Rory alone with her thoughts, it's a concept that I love to read in fanfiction and you do it so well.

Nice story. I don't think saying no to Jess was a mistake, but sleeping with Dean definitely was. I liked that Lorelai bought her a new mattress.

i think youi should continue seriously it was good u could have her go to jess and tell him what she's thinking.

Great story.
Even though it was a one parter, you should consider continuing this as a Lit. You're a great writer!

Hey!

This was pretty well done, though I do think that you are much better at writing fluff etc. This was not bad, though. And this part actually made me laugh:

She thinks about that night constantly. Being in her room brings the memories back. She hates it. She threw away those sheets, that comforter; Lorelai even bought her a new mattress at her request, but it doesn't take away the thoughts.

Just the idea of Lorelai buying her a new mattress, I think that that was a little too much, but other than that it was a pretty good fic.

Bye, smile :-)

good start! now get rory and jess back together!