awww i love it!

Beautiful... Really nice imagery. The memories made me want to cry.

-Piratess-Bell

Very different and very sad. Very good imagery.

Red Bess Rackham

I'm sorry, but I really do not like this story. 1) It's not that well written, and I just don't like it. 2) That was a NUCLEAR WEAPON on that ship and he wasn't that far away to escape when it blew up. Sorry, but I really do NOT like your story.

Well, I was skeptical when I read the summary, but this has potential. Yes, the premise (surviving a nuclear blast? I think not.) is not the greatest, but I liked the pyreflies image/motif. If you took out some of the extraneous/cliched stuff, edited it to make it flow, and changed the timing (maybe when he decides to take AJ's place and set off the bomb himself?), it could be really good.