Unique- a note though, Luna is a Ravenclaw, she wouldn't be in the Gryfindor Common Room or be repimended by Minerva...

This one-shot was absolutely brilliant. You portrayed Luna so well, just like herself and it's sad how Luna's picked on so much, how people forget that she's human too and that she can feel pain and hear what they say about her. But Luna is still a kick-ass person and I love her. Anyways great one-shot!

Anna(JypsieMoon)

I really liked this one shot, a really good reflection of Luna.

I can't believe I haven't read this story before.

Luna is so Luna-ish. I don't know how to express what I'm thinking, but you've managed to write Luna as she is, no explanations needed.

Absolutely BRILLIANT. Amazing. Perfect. I feel so privileged to read this story- you are such a talented author.

x Smaginn

Applause. That was fantastic. I loved how you portrayed the Rain with Luna. How you said it washes away unshed tears. It was quiet beautiful. Wonderful imagery running through my head. Just awesome. Great! Keep it up. Nicely done. Good scene with the kiss too. " )

i liked it, keep up the good work. :)

-Guardian de Sangre

Beautiful.

Good lord that was indeed awesome. YAY. Perfect one-shot.

woah.

That was wonderful! I thoroughly enjoyed how you kept the angst consistent...Harry's characterization is perfect, and your portryal of how Luna still hurts inside - brilliant. :)

Oh, very nice. Loved it. You wrote Luna very well. Awesome story! _

this was on a favorite's list of one of my favorite's, and i must say i really enjoyed it. i'm more of a herm/draco person, but i really loved the luna/harry thing. i've never read a fic about them before... it's always been ginny/harry, ron/luna, herms/draco or something. i really really enjoyed it. great job!

Overall, I enjoyed the premise. I kind of come around to Harry/Luna every now and then, and the sudden urge and kiss in the rain was very well done and quite romantic.

The verb tenses got me a bit confused here and there. Also, as Luna is in Ravenclaw, why would she keep being in the Gryffindor common room? (unless I read it incorrectly)

Anyhoo, you have some lush language and interesting Harry thoughts. Again, the last bit in the rain was meltable good.

Thanks for the exchange.

-AM from FA :)

More than angsty, I would call this touching and rather romantic. It would be quite a good, interesting, ambitious piece of writing, were it not for one major problem.

Is English not your first language? There are a number of un-idiomatic expressions and outright grammar mistakes. The verb “divulge” means not “understand” but “spread an explanation of something, make something widely known”. "Beyond the brinks of normality" is not an idiom, and "brink" is never, to the best of my knowledge, used in the plural. Also, "brink", as opposed to edge or bound, has a definite connotation of immediate danger: while you can be "on the edge of victory" as much as "on the edge of defeat", you can only be "on the brink of complete disaster". Beware of dramatic, emotionally loaded words such as that. "Oftentimes" is archaic and portentous; modern English says "often". And so on...

As for syntax, you have an unfortunate habit of moving from present to imperfect to present: "sometimes, …when a particularly amusing bit of gossip about her makes its way (present) around the Gryffindor common room, he would take the time (imperfect) to try and divulge the reason, or lack of reason, behind Luna Lovegood… who seems (present) so detached"; or, again, "when Ron engages (present) him in a conversation about Quidditch or Hermione reminds (present) him of an unfinished piece of homework, he would simply forget (imperfect) about it. She fades (present) away…" This is simply wrong. If you want that kind of sentence structure, you must put your whole sentence in the past: "when Ron engaged him in a conversation about Quidditch, orHermione reminded him of an unfinished piece of homework, he would simply forget. She faded away…" A rarer alternative would be: "when Ron engages him in a conversation about Quidditch, or Hermione reminds him of an unfinished piece of homework, he will simply forget. She fades away…" But do not mix present and past tenses.

There are several other mistakes in usage and syntax, but I do not want to build one enormous review all about it. If you write to me privately I will send you an analysis.

Nevertheless I liked the atmosphere and thought behind it, and I think you have the makings of a first-rate writer.

Oh, this is so sweet! I love HP/LL! Write more of this pairing, please!