OK kid, mediocore work. But I can tell you worked hard so I'll give you a 6 outta 10. Don't hate me I just think you could have done better with the dialogue and description. Crim's my favourite character so I'm glad you made him a hero. Liked the switch backs between game world and real world like in the show. And I really think you would enjoy the video games. Good Luck kid!

hm..very very nice! I must admit you have a really nice talent when it comes to writing stories, (and giving reviews! (giggle) Sorry I'm REALLY laughy today...Anyways, really nice story please keep updating!

Um...could you add some dialouge to this? I like it, but it could use dialouge.

wow i loved it! (_) i cant believe no ones reviewed for this since its such a great story!