I've been waiting a LONG time for this. I know it's far in the furture, but I always like to know what my fics are leading towards, helps me with closure.
Holy **, physically you are showing Kenny's anguish over this better than any author I've ever seen, BUT...his thoughts are dull in comparison. Where is the stream of guilty conciousness? Kenny's voice inside is own head is always so powerful whether he's thinkgin good or bad things, why is it not there now? not a big deal, but I'm having to really pick here.
You're doing well on with Kiennen. He just has so much of that unrelenting anger, it's great. Like his father, but vastly different.
I can't wait for more and too see how Caranky and kenny act as...damn...old men! Cranky would be 46!

Yes, yes...I get the coveted award for world's crappiest reviewer. ::takes bow:: It's been like a LONG time since this has been posted. Just been busy. But to the good stuff...

I'm liking seeing Cranky older here. It(on the outside at least) seems he finally has some things together. but who knows what happened to get him there.

Thankfully I still see Cranky as he's been developed so far in this older man...good job.

I wasn't feeling Katerina and Cranky. You SAID he fell deeply in love with her. But I didn't FEEL his emotions at all here. Kinda drab really. Didn't see hers either. Even if it was kinda an understood thing their actions should give it away. Make me want them together...er...I mean the audience...make the audience want them together. =)

AND...let's get this moving along. Don't get pulled into this one night one location scenario. Where are the characters, get the plot moving along, the emotions of what Kiennan did and Kenny's reactions were right on...don't let that go away by beating around the bush!

It's rough aging your characters nearly twenty years in a story while still writing for them at the younger age. Just be careful is all. Good job here, really. Update soon and get it moving!

I have to agree with Vammy. The plot thickens! Can't wait to see more. Continue...

You capture the rebellious spirit of a teenager perfectly. I like the fight scene. Keep it up.

Neat. I like your writing style. Its descriptive nature makes it easy to form a mental picture of what Kenneth sees and feels. On to chp 2!

Excellent job in portraying Kenny's sorrow over his son. It was beautiful to say the least. You say things with the actions and movements of your characters that I could only hope to state correctly. I am left wondering why Kiennen ran off and what happened between him and Chris that Chris isn't with him. It's also good to see it still takes the apocolypse to wake Kenny! =) More, and soon please!

Am I just a pervert or is the song Kiennen kinda dirty? That's besides the point. This was execellent. There's just so much to say really. The end was just chilling, for these fourteen year old boys to see this, one being the cause is just crazy. Kenny does seem like the evil father here though, so you're effectitive in that, I think he'll learn hwo to be better. I can't wait to see the other characters. Julian, a religious counselor? I can see it...kinda like one of those guys that come to your middle school and tell stories and stuff. I can't wait to see more. I'm wondering how Julian will fit into your new Act 5 now. Oh yeah...and I loved Kiennen's voice mail messege.

Hey there. Sorry it's taken me so long to review. I've been moving into my new apartment and training for colorguard. I swear my muscles are going to burst out of my shirt. At least I look buff again like Cammy! =) Anyway, on to this story. I like it. Having a story based on characters kids sometimes turn me off because most use all new characters, but you still incorporate the parents. I am left wondering who Chris's mother is? I guess we will have to wait until you reveal it here...or maybe in your other uncomplete street fighter story? (That by the way I'm waiting on.) E-mail me sometime too, did you ever get the rough draft I sent you? i'm worried my computer is messed up. Good story again!

Some kid kenny has. I like this already noctorro. Update this soon, oh and check out my Project Alexander fic if you want. Ciao.

This seems interesting. Kenny is getting a taste of his own medicine.

Josh, I love it! Kenny's all grown up with a troublemaker teenager of his own. I can already tell I'm really going to be into this story. You must post the next one soon! And let Kenny paddle that kid! =D