the part where she saw her cut hair was the best. lol. it doesn't actually say her father died, I think you made that up. But it works. XD

of course, ANOTHER EXALENT STORY! write more! just never stop writting! ARG!

Oh wow, this was pretty awesome! :)

it was pretty good, i alwasy wondered what happened to zelda's dad...but didn't she already have short hair? maybe i'm wrong...

this was great! the details were so vivid that i could instantly see Zelda running in fear and hear Ganondorf's insane laughter!

kewl this is good. You should write one about ganondorf attaking hyrule market.

That was cool..I writing one to it is called In the Eye of the Beholder..please read it..you are a great writer.

If you're talking about "heel", as in the end of a foot, you used the wrong context ("heal" means to mend). When she turns on her "heal" to face Ganon, I found it a little strange. (_) You're having little problems with grammar everywhere- nothing really big, but little honest mistakes, not typos. Stuff like punctuation, the difference between "lie" and "lay", etc. Try and get a beta-reader if all else fails. Also, remember that curse words (excepting the "d" one) are only existent in a mundane world. This is Hyrule, so I wouldn't expect to find many of them (especially from a well-bred princess) in Hyrule. You're also having a few little problems with tenses. As far as the story is concerned, you wrote it emotionally and beautifully.

Hey, not bad! A different point of view.

I liked it! You wirte well.

Ooh.. intense. Nice.

Good story, although I plan on reading another take on that situation soon...

DanG! Dat wuz good!