the chspter felt empty...

(now how I mean that is in a complementary way...)

COOL! The first chapter makes the fic sound like it is going to be more interesting. Keep going!

Beshimi. Hyottoko. Shikijou. Hannya.

kyahahaha!! XD This is so rhythmic. More so than mine, I think. Gives a feeling of beating drums. War drums or something. I think it's cool. Definitely sets the mood.

Meh... I want to see what you do with the plot for this one!! (Is Tomoe, by any chance, related to Enishi and Megs in this story as well?)

Very different style, different format, but it's GOOD. You, are good.
I can feel the emotion, the angst...and I must say I do like the plot you've come up with. Eager to see Megumi as Enishi's sister. If anyone can make it work, you can.

I like this poem style ^_^
Good...