It feels like you haven't finished but even so I must say I did enjoy what you have written. I just wish you'd write more.

Cool one, NaijaChiqa. Totally believable Ryan reaction. Very good ending. And I really liked his Ryan ** girls inner spiel at the beginning (except for one tiny point -- "screeching and squealing"? A bit ugh and not quite sexy sounds, if you see what I mean. But I suppose it is Marissa, so...)

Definetly ... original. Like to see where this goes

Good chapter, at leastt I hope it's the start of a series. It's good, has a great flow and the characters are well written. Should write it as a story with chapters as your onto a great start. Consider seriously writing as a series.

Oh yes there is! Haha, this is great, please keep going! Soon!

Ooh, He loved it!

Great Stuff!

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