 KJS 7/26/00 . chapter 1I liked your poem. I thought it was a bit short, but it had that echoing ring that comes with the sadness she must have felt. The movie didn't glimpse really at how she must have felt with the loss of her world. I would have like to have seen more, but this poem was okay. Though you should fix spelling for summary in the poem and out... It should be 'loss of her father', and the story's summary on the index should be 'she had lost', not losted. My little nitpicks. ;) |