Ah, tis a good story but you could make the emotion and description stronger

Actually... I think that this is a pretty logical fanfic. Though I'm not much of a JakDax fan, I don't like JakKiera, either. I don't hate Kiera (her voice can be a little annoying sometimes) either, though. But I think, as far as Jak II is concerned, it would NEVER work. Because she can NEVER understand the pains that Jak has been through, and she is still exactly like as she was in the first game. Jak is definitely a changed man. It would never work.

It was a short fic, but a good one. Nicely written!

It was really, really well written. I am not a Jak/Daxter supporter, I'm a Torn/Jak writer myself, but hey, I know a good story when I see it. Keep up the good work.

Very short, but I liked it ^__^
And, I hate Keira to 8P

I thought it was wonderful! I just love JakxDax. I don't like Keira either. Not that I have anything against her, I just...don't.*shrugs* There could have been more towards Jak and Dax in the story, but hey, I'm not complaining. I liked it!...alot!...I can't even find any words right now to explain. So I'll leave it as this--I loved it! So...heartfelt...there *nods in approval* And I'll SO be watching for more stories, you can count on that! ^-^

Aw, cute story, (Actually, I'm a Jak/Keira writer, a yJak/male writer, AND a bit of a Jak/OC writer, so I'm split in many different ways lol)
Well, brill story, it would've been good if Jal had of told Keira that he loved Daxter, break the gal's heart even more, lol, please writee more, I really liked your fic! :D

I'm not a JakxDax supoorted ans there is no way in hell I'm a Keira Jak supporter either. But despite that, I like this story! The way you wrote Keira's reasction seemed so real. I could actaully picture her falling to her knees and just pointing for him to leave.

I can't beleive I'm saying this, but please continue.

*glomps* That was beautiful! I almost feel sorry for Keira though...note I said almost! I hate her too! *stabbity death*

You have to wright more Jak x Dax things. Theres not enough of it out there. I could help you if you need any ideas. Yaoi mind worken overtime. I would wright some but I have a deadline. Hope to read some more of your stories.

HOOWAA! *dances about* (Rabid JakxDax supporter right here, yo!) ^_^ O, I like this, yes I do! I think the way you showed Jak's emotions (or lack there of ^^) towards Kiera - they were well done, not to mention the way he feels about Daxter *melts to puddle of fan-girl goo*
As much as I would LOVE to see Jak crush Kiera's black little HEART,(evil, insensitive, EVIL, Erol-loving **!...*embarrassed cough*) you did it in a way that seems very... Jak-like. XD Got pulled right in, which is always a good thing. =3
Could have done with being a bit longer, and maybe with a bit more Dax-mush, like how THOSE two got together, or somethin' equally mushy... (then again, I'm a fast readin', JakxDax **, so, eh *shrugs* XD)
Still, a great little one-shot ficlet! Keep up the good work!
(And I SO agree with you on Kiera and Jak being "one of the least compatible couples EVER" *nods* Jak and Daxter BELONG together in MY eyes...I shall accept it no other way! *stomps foot down* ^_^ So...All I really have left to say is...write moreJakxDax! PLEASE! X3

Chuwahhah XD *cackles* dat was pretty deng cool! ^_^ I've read what I BELIEVE to be all of your other works (sorry I never left a comment! ^^; Silly Demz. *bapbap*) and you're a highly talented writer! JakxDax is my fave pairing ever, 'course, cos Im a sentimental geek like that :3 WO!

NOW! Reviewness!! *squeals!* That was good! Never encountered anything quite like it! XP Awesome construction skills, use of grammer/spelling, phrasing was very clean... a bit choppy in parts, but that means you're lucky. Instead of having to fix the problem of runon sentences, you might wanna make yours longer XD Woo! Keira's jump on Jak with such anger was a bit... of a different view (I'd only think she'd muster up that kind of pissiness if she caught him going out on the side when she thought, quite stupidly, that they were an unconfessed item. *snort* XD) but it was cool! Serious, this whole piece had a lot of portraying of ideals, even though it was VERY short ^_^; And I commend you for that! Very very cool. Kinda odd it didnt have Dax himself in it, but hey, ill go with whatever :3 Luvluv~!
~Demyrie~