That was so beautiful...if its alright with u...can I use some of your poem for a later chapter of my fanfic(The second vision of escaflowne)? Email and tell me if I can or not. But this is really good. You really captured Allen's 'suicidal mood' and yes ladies he does have that kind of mood..during this one scene in the anime he almost cries because he longs for his sister and he feels like his world is upside down. I can relate to that. That is why I love Allen so much...we can relate to each other...and yes DTK represents me(well she did because now I believe she is a whole differnet person but I am not getting into that now.)... sorry this review was so damn long but I really like this poem. I'm definetly putting u and ur poem in favs. Thank you for touching my heart. _- Asturia's Angel 0;)

ooo! that's real good! - you must write more!

*applauds* Loved it! Exquisite!

*girly scream of delight* That was AWESOME! I loved the heart-ache of it all...Poor Allen! "Sheathe your sword" please! I do NOT want to see you so...suicidal...that was great!

Nice job, this is one of the best poems I've read on FF.Net so far.

Thanx for the suggestion, but no. Engraved is something done to things, not people, therefore without any pain whatsoever - not what I wanted to prtray. Also, hide your emotions is not exactly what I wanted either (plus it doesn't rhyme _)

wow i thought it was great. Just got some suggestions though. in paragraph 6 why don't u try using engraved instead of tatooed, and in 7 try hide your emotions instead of tuck away your heart. keep on writing you have a lot of talent.

Woah. And I mean, woah. This is really awesome! I loved it! "sheathe your sword, tuck away your heart". how wonderful! This is going on my favorites list. i really loved it!