This was GREAT!

Usually I don't like THE main character dyin but your way of doing it...just didn't feel like he died,more like he took the next step...wierd...?

I didn't really feel the joy at knowing Ranm died, BUT neither did I feel anger like usual...just...nothing...Thumbs up for your skills as writer for NOT making me hate you for that!

From what I can recall of Ranma and his cat form this is a much more 'realistic' protrayal of the time when Ranma first underwent the Neko-ken.

Afterall he has the mentality of a cat and Genma HURT him so he would, like any cat would, retaliated. The fact that his 'claws' can cut through steel means that Genma stood a much more likely chance of ending up as you have it then what went on in the manga.

Well done.

Haven't seen much from you in a long time Muishiki. I went back and read this old ficcy for the first time and found it delightful (if a hair on the dry side.)

Your philosophical pov's never fail to impress. I noticed something at the end of the chapter though.

My plan was to do a Ranma/wheel of time crossover (which has the making of a disaster about to happen), but didn't want to do it until I have a clearer plan of what I expect to accomplish.

Ehem. Where the hell is this...?

Great story. I was enraptured the whole way through.

Ja!

MB

Eh.This direction is starting to go bad in my opinion. One more chapter!

muishiki,

I really liked this story. A good AU plot and lots of adventure and fun. Think you mentioned somewhere that this is your first attempt at fanfiction - impressive!

Now, don't take this the wrong way, but I found the ending disappointing. Or, more accurately, I find it 'lacking' or 'plot-twisting' or 'sudden'. Yes, 'sudden' that describes it perfectly.

I'm a RanmaAkane fan, but I wasn't expecting this story to go that way when I started reading it. It was a pleasant surprise. And Akane taking the initiative? Well, its been done before, but still brought a smile to my face when I read it here.

I feel that this story could use a bit more "formatting". Perhaps an extra paragraph here or there? Still, it's mostly nitpicking.

Now that I think about it, this must be the first of your stories that I've read. I think I'll check out your other works as well.

Smiling,

chronodekar

I've read the story before, but never bothered to read the notes. This time I read the note at the bottom of the page and I felt compelled to comment. I have to admit I am an Akane hater, but that is due to a bias against any person or character who is abusive. In your story however I have to say that I can actually accept her and Ranma together as a viable relationship, because you used your characters to pull her head out of her rectum.

I am surprised by Ranma's actions in regards to Happosai. Feeling that placing the Ultimate Weakness Moxibustion point on Happosai was wrong and having them release him from it was not a virtues thing to do. Happosai is evil, he uses his abilities to harm others and steal. Now, every woman Happosai molests and steals from is a victim of Ranma also. A wise man said, 'All that is required for evil to flourish is for good (wo)men to do nothing.' Ranma has just done nothing, I can only hope that this is addressed in a later chapter. Otherwise the story has been enjoyable with a interesting twist on the Ranma story.

I can't seem to make myself finish this story..

I really have no interest at all in this story any more.

I didn't even finish a tenth of this chapter.

I may or may not finish it if I ever come across it again in a few months. Assuming I still read fanfics then.

"..an angle with a Kalashnikov.." Awesome image.

"After his demonstration.." I really think you're looking for a different word. Demolition perhaps? Though that doesn't make much sense in this context either.

Demonstrations has nothing to do with explosions, unless it's a demonstration of military might or new mining techniques.

A rather boring chapter. But these kinds of chapters usually are.

"..and Ranma came back carrying a stone about the size of a bowling ball." For someone who has trouble lifting his own book bag that doesn't make sense. A stone that size would have to weigh at least three times as much.

There is no such thing as a song in fanfiction. Without sound it's just words on paper, or in this case data shown on the screen.

Man, I had forgotten how gigantic some ANs used to be. It's just as annoying as I remember though.

I think that the problem most have with Akane is her complete inability to adapt. Sure, it's just stating the obvious, but it is the core fault that everyone hate. Many, most actually, think that the ability to adapt is one of the best qualities of human beings. If not the best. Some may word it differently, and some may not even be aware that that is what they actually mean, but it's all the same really.

So, an OC Akane that gets the ability to adapt (An adaptable Akane is by definition OC..) is okay for most that isn't too concerned with the name and image.

Anyway, a rather dull chapter, despite all that happened in it. I can't quite put my finger on what it is that makes it so dull though.

"Dinner that night was a quite affair." I've seen this too often for it to be a simple mistake. There is a very large difference between "quite" and "quiet". The latter is the one that should've been used here.

"Have I told you I hate?" This is also something that can be seen now and then in your story. More in the later chapters before this one than in the first part.

"..and over hesitated for just a.." ? ? ?

This was a repost? Perhaps you should keep your chapters at the length of your fourth one? That way it will be easier to find and fix mistakes. Won't be so terribly tedious either. Or you could just get yourself a good beta or two.

Tease. I thought Kasumi would be told about Ranma and remember his name. Have to wait at least one more chapter I suppose. Though dr. Tofu's clinic would be a good place for Ranma and Kasumi to meet.

This really is an amusing story. I had some concerns at first with the "double" marriage, but it is incorporated into the story as opposed to the story being incorporated in the marriage. More often than not it ends up being the second one, and it ruins an otherwise good story.

"Herb and Konatsu didn't mind, but expressed concerns about noise." This is one of the things that makes it amusing.

"Herb sat next to Akane, Ranma squeezed behind Hiroshi, and Konatsu sat near the front of the class." Okay for assuming that anyone reading fanfiction will be familiar with most everything. But some work should be put into the introduction of the characters. So far the trio's and the Elder's introductions were the only really good ones. No need to just rush through the introductions..

I was a bit confused at first about why Ranma didn't ask about Akane's and Nabiki's family, or if he could speak to their parents. Then I thought that since Akane didn't seem to react to his surename he didn't see the point. Or something.

"Lighting and thunder burst from.." Probably already learned this years ago but anywho. It should be lightning (notice the "n" that's not present in lighting) and thunder.

Happosai remains one of my favorite characters, and there is no way to make his first entrance too dramatic.

"Ranma replied by placing his slipper on his head." I'm afraid that one went over my head. It looks like purely eastern comedy. That combined with the comment about the laughter set the mood though. So I guess, mission accomplished.

Great chapter.