Okay, here goes...
This was a good story. But I have a couple of things to nitpick on. For instance, it seemed a bit rushed. For instance, we dive right into Mio's sorrow and jealousy over Itsuki and Mayu... but one problem. In the game, when Mayu is possessed-ish, yes, she blathers on about wanting to see Itsuki, and Mio comes to him for help, but they don't really love him like you've described. However, it could work if you made, perhaps, a prequel, explaining how, and why, Mio and Mayu both fell in love with Itsuki. (As if it isn't obvious! *drools over Itsuki*)
I'm afraid my nitpicking might have something to do with my dislike of the couplings, but pay no mind. Like, personally, I'm a fan of *takes deep breath* Mutsuki/Yae (Mio)/Itsuki/Sae (Mayu). In other words, Sae (Mayu) is kinda left in the dust. That's because, I'm sorry to say, I am not Sae's (or Mayu's) greatest fan... they are too dependant for me, and the fact that they both fell on purpose just irks me to no end. Besides, in the game, when Mayu is actually WITH you (which is what? A whopping 40% of the time?), how she keeps calling out 'Mio, wait!' and 'Mio, my leg hurts' and 'Mio, slow down!' etc... y'know... I just wanna murder her.
ANYHOO. Now I am done. Good day.
~Crimson Kaoru

read it about a week ago but i've been too busy to review...
SORRY, really
wanted you to know that i drew a pic of Mutsuki and Mio after reading your fic. it really inspired me so i did it. if you want it plz mail me then i'll send it to ya. and just so you know i want that wallpaper you were talking about
ThankZ...

WALLPAPER PLEASE!

Oh! This whole story has kept me on my toes with excitement! Kweh! I like it a lot...and I also will go read the sequel! Kweh!! Y'know, Ayane's POV was really...random! LoLz...

This whole story was wonderful and I plan on reading the sequel!!

I really like this story, but the thing is I can't get to chapter 3.

Hi!Me again.I just have to tell you that I cried my eyes out when I read this chapter,especialy when Mutsuki started to fade away.I LOVE THIS FAN FIC SO FAR AND I WILL CONTINUE READING IT UNTIL THE END!!

Chitose Tachibana

Gr!I am so mad at Itsuki!He made Mio cry!But now she will get to be with my other brother,Mutsuki.YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY!Mio won't be sad anymore.Im still mad at Itsuki though.Anyway GREAT fan fic!!Write more.

Chitose Tachibana

I LOVE this story I cryed

Phew! I was panicking when she was on that bench!
I'm glad she and Mutsuki could be together, and, no, I don't really know Japanese, so thanks for the words in parenthesis!

funny Ayane. Very funny! THE POWAH! Man, that's a nice, fun little change of pace to the story there. Great job.

(claps) Excellent. Loved it! Well done! It was so sweet! I loved Chitose.
I got a bit confused with Ayame, but figured it out in the end (lol)

What a way to end your first story!! And, it seens that there is more to it!! Oh, I can't wait!!

Ayane's part was very funny. Congrats on the story and keep it up!! ;-)

I see. I can't wait to see your story complete. Take the time needed to make the last Chapter the best!!

You got mine and everyones support Lakija!!

Yay! Please get the lasy chapter up soon! Can't wait n.n
Also estatic that you love FFP and thinking about contributing to my site. You'll be the first person! (hugs)