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| orangebronco 2004-10-20 ch 1,  | abuseHm...the story and song arent really making good friends in my opinion...dont think they are really flowing. Good attempt tho, songfics are bumpy. The story is a bit rocky, but i get the jist...What you can do tho, is next time take some thot and planning into this. Might want to seperate the verses a bit more so you can make more into the story and make it spectacular. I aint flaming, just saying... |
| fiendish one 2004-08-18 ch 1, | abusethis is great so far, very beautifully written. you should continue this, but it also works the way you left it. but very well done! |