this is so real
carryin da bannah,
Annie

An interesting perspective into what could conceivably have happened. Spot, for all that people love the little guy, isn't really given much of a background in the movie, and this is a very believable possibility. I also like the fact that it peaks, though very vaguely, into the future. Overall, a good grasp of the character I think.

Only two things I can offer as constructive criticism: first, "And no the Brooklyn Lodging House . . . " should have a comma after "no" and second, while I could be wrong, I don't think the term "teenager" would have been used in the turn of the century; I'm pretty sure it first showed up around the forties. Again, I could be mistaken about this. It happens. Sometimes. Nothing major, I'm just Evil Criticizer Lady.

Anyway, I really liked this very much a lot LIKEWOAH. Keep writin'.

-Uoko

awe that's so depressing but alas it's realistic. you know i do believe you owe an update on some other stories as well ha ha ha! but this is great really..

L.T.N.N.

Wow. Very very nice. I loved it wayy much!