I love this story! I actually can't stand Uruki. I'm not THAT big a fan of Tomite either, but... I still thought it was great!
My favourite bit was your description of Hien. I'm sorry, but I died at that. XDD

Whoa...wow. That's really good. I guess the best way to tell you how it maed me feel was to say it was like a punch in the gut...but I don't mean that in a negative way, just that it was really powerful.

very sad
i liked it a lot
write more soon, ne?

Oh wow, if this is your unedited version.. wonder what your edited work would be like. :P Very nice. I'm familiar with Genbu Kaiden myself, so it was fun reading this. Although Uruki... =_= Uruki is my favorite character in the manga. But Tomite is great, too.. I liked how you described his love for Takiko. Makes the reader feel his longing, too. :D Hien.. he reminds me of Tasuki with his hair unbound. XD