It was kinda annoying to read this without quotes " " around the words, but it was good.

Wow! Ok What a terrific begining! Waiting for the rest of the story!

Interesting. I'm wicked confused, though. I have no idea who's who and who's talking. I don't know if you're trying to be intentionally vague, but if not, you may want to add quotation marks and the occasional "he said" and "she said". Other than that, it's nice.

-BBDS