That's the end of it? Of course, if you want to make a cannonical approach of how Sally felt and all those stuff.. But it seems incomplete. I'm hoping that's not the end..

POOR JACK I KNOW A SIREN TO PUT YOU TO SLEEP

Zomg I love this story! Are you going to be writing more like this? If yes,please write more!

Oh do update please. I've been waiting ages. I must have more! UPDATE!

I love this Fic. This Fic is the first one I read. I'm not sure but is this where the srory ends? Please E-mail me back if it is or isn't.

Great! I love how well you can get in the characters heads like that! You really got all of them down to a tee...lol...really! I hope you update soon...please? -puppy eyes- With cherries on top? With loverly candies? All in all, it is a GREAT story (so far) and I hope you'll be able to update soon! ^_^

When I am not writing fanfiction, I write stories that do get a little dark and depressing, but always have a light of hope. This is what you have placed in your stories, and this is what I love about it.

I always saw Dr. Finkelstein as overprotective, but I can understand why some authors (like yourself) see him as cold and heartless, and I respect this, not only because it makes great fanfiction when channeled the right way, but also shows different perpesctives on how people view a semi-important character.

I really like where you are going with Sally, and how she views her now changing world. You have found just the right view of how someone who was just created might see the world around her. This is another reason I love this story.

Please continue. I long for more as much as Sally longs to see Jack again.

-Nightmare1

awesome, keep writing

Wow... great job

Wow! I really enjoy your characterization; not everyone can enter the characters' heads like this. You've developed the characters well, and provided a nice perspective on their motivations leading into the movie. Kudos!

I'd be very interested to see where this goes post-canon, once the characters are free to develop as they will.

Howdy. I love this story so far. The doctors actions are rather in character (but it still makes you want to grab a glove and slap him right back). Jack and Sally are gorges, so cute. They were meant to be from the first scene they were in

Aw, poor Sally.

This is rather depressing, but I think it's supposed to be. Poor Sally, she doesn't really have much of a life at this point.

And call me crazy, but I feel a little sorry for Dr. Finklestein as well. Life (well, existance anyway) doesn't seem to have been very kind to him and he's currently returning the favor.

Well done!

I like this chapter even better. You're showing what the doctor thinks now; he's more than a little messed up but he does have his own reasons for what he's doing. Doesn't make him any less of a self-centered little git, though.

Chapter 3 was also interesting with all the descriptions of how they see each other.

'She had pale blue skin, like a zombie's, with several scars... no, rough black stitches on her delicated limbs.'

I really like this line in particular. Halloween Towners think in terms of monsters, so Jack thinking of something being like a zombie would be perfectly normal.

I'm really liking this one so far. Your descriptions of how Sally percieves Jack are especially interesting (a whip with a white ball on it. He does look a bit like that, actually).