this is a well written fic. you've got good discription but a lot of the time i don't actually know what's going on cause everything gets a bit confusing. also it would be easier to know who the character is if you put down the name rather than she/he unless you want the charater to remain a mystery

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Wow...just...OMG, I just want to hug Seven right now.

Your writing is improving a LOT, Ariel! I'm massively impressed ^_^V And I'm still a Seven fangirl.

The first thing I would like to say is: Thank God you didn't pair Pan up with Trunks!

And the second, I'm glad she showed compassion and stuck around to help Seven. That's what causes most of a city's decline, when the people stop caring. At least she did, and probably still does.

I wouldn't mind if someone eventually showed the tour groups a thing or two about entertainment at someone else's expense.

At one point you typed "modern-day runes". I think you meant to say "ruins".

The picture is unfolding slowly, and I'm glad of it.

It'd be pretty hypocritical of most of us to fault you for taking time in updating. Don't worry too much about it.

First off, were you listening to "Seven Nation Army" when you wrote this? I caught the phrase, and it just held me there. The song popped into my head, and it's still there. And oddly enough (for me, anyway), it seems to fit the mood of that part, too.

Second, if whomever has the crucifix is Catholic, do they realize that suicide is a mortal sin? (They probably aren't, and you already have the next chapter up, but I thought I'd note it.)

Third, I'm curious as to what caused the degradation of the city. Is it truly acid rain, or was it just a description of its harshness?

Fourth, I'm going to hold further questions and move on to the next chapter. My Internet connection keeps shorting out on my and I've had to retype this review several times.

And if I didn't say it, good chapter! I am looking forward to the next one, if the Internet cooperates.

*bops self on head for missing this* I suppose one of these days I'll get to an updated story in a timely fashion.

Again (and I'm sure I say this almost every time I review) I love the way you describe everything. In the first chapter, for instance, how Seven uses the sound of the rain to help navigate around. And in this, giving hints of how close Piccolo really was with Gohan and his family. The staircase.

Which brings me to wonder, does Piccolo even know how to show that he cares? Is he capable of demonstrating that emotion? And is that part of the problem? (Heck. I shouldn't be asking that. It probably is.)

Excellent work, as always. I hope I catch the update for the next chapter... this is turning out to be one of those "hand glued to the book" (or in this case, mouse) stories. ^^

What can I say? It's Seven's story. Even after all this time of knowing him I feel like I haven't even scratched the surface of who and what he is. He's always changing and evolving, and I still love him dearly as if he were my own - like you do Bo.

I hope you write more on this someday. *snugs*

Such vivid writing. I have also seen your art and you have the skills to be an awesome comic artist/author.

Seven point Five seems almost tragic to me, yet he has that hope within him. I hope he finds happiness.

Wow,
This has to be the most intelligent fic ever written on this website. Really all I can say is Wow! Please write more

I must hand it to you, this knocked me on my butt when I printed it out and read it on my way to work(I'm sneaking on to review *wink*). I couldn't stop until my fingers ran over the last dot at the bottom of the last page. I literally forgot I was in the car the whole time I read this. No lie.

I kept having little flashes of the thunder and rain pounding down, sounds of breathing and the voices. It's just. . .I don't know how to describe it. . .like I'm there. Seven is a complicated character from what I've seen of him. Only a complicated story could explain him and all his problems.

Hope you write more. I'll definitely read it.