 Lord Kelvin 9/12/04 . chapter 3That was so cute. I love a happy ending. Please write more! |
 DeathBallerinaAmy 9/6/04 . chapter 3o! a mystery! and tony might be alive?
omi! my mind is cheated! i thought he died...
wah! |
 Da-Adventurer-89 9/6/04 . chapter 3Not Bad... |
 Golbezandcrew 9/6/04 . chapter 3Golbez: I know where you live XD
Rage: no you don't
Sam: Chao!
Golbez: O.o i gots a big crew |
 DeathBallerinaAmy 9/5/04 . chapter 2hm
HM |
 Lord Kelvin 9/3/04 . chapter 2Ah yes. Afine chapter indeed. There is a real disease simillar to your one that is torturing many old people. Alzheimer disease if i'm right. It's a real horror. It's horrible if your grandmother etc is sick: she wakes up, asks where is her parents and cries once you tell her they're dead. And same thing every day. Every day the same circle reapeats itself
Have a nice, abuse-free day. |
 Lord Kelvin 9/1/04 . chapter 1Another brilliant concept, not the most original but great! And with your way of writing it's going to get even better. There are a few errors here. The ones that are stuck in my mind are:
'nightmar' - if it's not some kind of slang your characters use then it should be 'nightmare'
'siringe' - the word is 'syringe'
Sorry for being so... you know.
Have a nice, abuse-free day continuing the story. |