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Lord Kelvin 9/12/04 . chapter 3
That was so cute. I love a happy ending. Please write more!
DeathBallerinaAmy 9/6/04 . chapter 3
o! a mystery! and tony might be alive?

omi! my mind is cheated! i thought he died...

wah!
Da-Adventurer-89 9/6/04 . chapter 3
Not Bad...
Golbezandcrew 9/6/04 . chapter 3
Golbez: I know where you live XD

Rage: no you don't

Sam: Chao!

Golbez: O.o i gots a big crew
DeathBallerinaAmy 9/5/04 . chapter 2
hm

HM
Lord Kelvin 9/3/04 . chapter 2
Ah yes. Afine chapter indeed. There is a real disease simillar to your one that is torturing many old people. Alzheimer disease if i'm right. It's a real horror. It's horrible if your grandmother etc is sick: she wakes up, asks where is her parents and cries once you tell her they're dead. And same thing every day. Every day the same circle reapeats itself

Have a nice, abuse-free day.
Lord Kelvin 9/1/04 . chapter 1
Another brilliant concept, not the most original but great! And with your way of writing it's going to get even better. There are a few errors here. The ones that are stuck in my mind are:

'nightmar' - if it's not some kind of slang your characters use then it should be 'nightmare'

'siringe' - the word is 'syringe'

Sorry for being so... you know.

Have a nice, abuse-free day continuing the story.
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