Fantastic story! I'm the plot is very engaging, the characterizations are compelling (the way Kaname has grown, but the changes in the Mithril gang are much more subtle) and your pacing is darned near frantic! I really enjoyed reading this, even knowing it hasn't updated for 4 years and that I would be left forever wanting when I reached chapter 11, I couldn't stop myself.

Your Kaname has a very interesting and nuanced personality. I like the balance between her violent nature and her tortured conscience.

Great story all in all. Count me in as a fan. I'm off to read your Hikaru no Go work next!

Awesome story! I can't believe I've missed this one till now.

Too few stories ever focus on Kaname's Whispered capabilities,
and the scenario you came up with makes for a nice techno thriller. I especially like the way Kaname's project has had
so many unforseen consequences, and how she's having to come
to terms with them as they affect her personally.

So, I'd like to encourage you to complete this story, since
its come so close to its conclusion.

UDPATE!

I love this fic and I cannot wait until your next update! And I really hope that is soon~! ^_~

~byez

Ketsueki Inutaisho

Ah, my. So disappointing to not have more to read. I look forward to reading more when you can update.

You have spelled Kyouko's name as both Kyoko and Kyouko. Either spelling is okay, but I believe Kyouko is the most commonly accepted. Please pick one and stick with it.

Very well written, and quite intriguing. You've done a good job maintaining the tension, especially with the introduction of a new party at the end of the chapter. Excellent job on the characterizations, as well. I especially liked the way you portrayed Melissa, Kurz, and Sousuke's reactions to their new mission.

Some things have me a bit confused though. Wouldn't Tessa tell Kalinin about her feeling that something was wrong with Kaname? He does know about the Whispered. And I thought proximity was a factor in being able to sense or resonate with another Whispered. That is why Tessa had to go to Tokyo in the A21 arc. If Tessa was close enough sense Kaname's distress, it seems to me that the Tuatha de Danann should have been able to respond within hours. And since the possibility of Kaname being forced to divulge black technology information to an enemy organization was a concern, I would think that the mission to retrieve her would be prioritied. Of course, all these questions may end up being answered for me as I read farther...

Midnight in Massachusetts and I've been reading your work for several hours. Not that you need me to tell you this, but you've done an excellent job with your characterization.

I very much look forward to subsequent chapters. One thing that struck me, and perhaps it was a conscious choice to amplify how outside of the norm Tessa is for the military... a sailor will always refer to the "floor" as a "deck." Her comment to Kalinan about the deck being awash struck me as discordant.

Again, an engaging effort.

MAKE MORE!

Gripping beginning...must read more.

Thank you for the compliment. :) This was wonderful chapter. Keep up the good work. Can not wait for the next chapter.

Throughly engaging story, excellent use of ACC's and established charactesr to create a cohesive storyline that flows damn well... I'll be awaiting the next chapter of this one with baited breath :)

It's really impressive. Your story is more "real" then any of the others Full Metal Panic stories I have read so far, I think.

Bofors gun was an anti-air gun used in WW2, made by the british, used by the americans on warships and pulled by the back of a truck. just.. thought i'd let you know. (holy nutter goose you're a stickler for details.. let the author write!)

okay. This fic is amazingly intense. Very gripping stuff, with characterisation that is bang on considering the years past and the circumstances that these characters have found themselves in. But bloody hell! I hope that this in NOT an abandon-fic. The quality of this is just too damn high to be cast adrift. Please, please update!
-Z

Its been awhile since I have reviewed. This getting too good to stop now. More... I understand if you have writers block. I have it too. I hope the next chapter is coming soon.