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Ohana 2006-12-20 . chapter 3
Excellent. I totally love Neville, and I totally love your fic. Keep up the good work! =)
RunningWithCoyotes 2006-06-04 . chapter 3
This scene, the one where they kiss, is so cute it got me into a sugar-overload and i'm all twitchy. I loved it.

.coyo.
xxStarDreamerxx 2005-09-18 . chapter 3
x x x this is fab update soon! x x x
evilbeckles 2005-07-31 . chapter 3
no dont be evil. update soon please i realy want to know how hermione and harry act.
dancing in daydreams 2005-05-27 . chapter 3
I don't really agree with the other reviewer who didn't like the last part. I guess it might be a bit OOC for Ron but i think it might be exactly the way Neville reacts: just saying everything without much hesitation in a rush of courage (we know the reason he's a Gryffindor:)! ) Oh, and what about the promised update?
anonymous 2005-05-07 . chapter 3
...hmm...I see no new chapter.

Please put up a new chapter! Please?! Pretty pretty please??!
(If you couldn't tell, I think this story is really good, and want to see more of it...really soon.)
reviewer person 2005-03-15 . chapter 3
you better write some more stories...or else. No no just please write more chapters for the sake of humanity! ^_^
Evilevergreen 2005-02-23 . chapter 3
This is a really cool story, but I was a little disappointed in this chapter. I thought, Neville's reaction, would have been more like pushing him away and going, What the hell?!

I just kind of expected a little conflict before they actually got together. I mean, what if Neville wasn't gay? Wouldn't that have been one of Ron's fear? Plus Ron coming into terms with his own sexuality?

Because it doesn't make sense, that Ron stayed away for so because of it, and then be okay with it when he was caught. See what I'm trying to see.

So saying that, I would have to agree with Desiree K Troy, this was not realistic and it came off *too* easy.

Now if I were you, this is what I would do, keep chapter three exactly the way it is, and make up for it in the next chapter.

I would have Ron in his room, in his bed, kind of watching Neville sleeping. He's still kind of happy from what has taken place between them, but he looks over at Seamus and kind of comes down from his high and starts to think, 'OMG what am I going to do?'

Because I'm sure Ron wouldn't want everyone to know about him in Neville; he's kind of proud like that.

Okay, that's all I really have for a review, I hope it was helpful. I can't wait to see the next chapter. Please, I beg of you, please don't take several months, it's a killer. =)
DRUNKEN LANDLORD 2005-02-23 . chapter 3
Aww
keep it up I love this ^__^
I Write Tragedies 2005-02-23 . chapter 3
I really like this story but this chapter seemed sort of fluffy to me. It was too simple and easy. Wouldn't Ron and Neville be scared of being tortured for being gay? I find it to be unrealistic of them to not even care who knows especially so early on. Later in the story it would be realistic for them to come out and not really care what people say but taunts and so on could easily ruin what could be a great relationship.
ISC 2005-02-23 . chapter 3
Aw, sweet! Go Neville! ^_^ This is one of my favorite pairings now. ^_^ I wish there were more of this kind! Post soon
Satio 2004-12-05 . chapter 2
Awesome story so far! I really am enjoying it. It seems like you have no grammar errors so that makes me happy. I hope you continure soon! Ciao!
Your Local Witch 2004-12-04 . chapter 2
Wow! I was never into Ron/Neville until now. This is good. I noticed that when Neville asked how the family was Ron left out PErcy, and I was prepared to write a very angry review, but then, yaay! Neville saved the day. Sorry, I love Percy too much. Thanks for reviewing my fic, by the way!
I-Shave-Clowns 2004-11-29 . chapter 2
For the first time, I have chosen a Ron fiction over a Harry fiction, and I like it! It's wonderful! And I love this pairing, you did a truly magnificent job!
I Write Tragedies 2004-11-18 . chapter 2
I really liked this story. I'm not sure if you're finished or planning on continuing. I am really interested in seeing where this could lead so I will add you to my author alert list and wait for an update. Hopefully, one comes.
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