   WhoIamIsMe3492 2007-04-25 . chapter 18wow, every1 was ooc. i mean, no1 is that stupid! You have this guy who doesn't even care where he hits her,it wuld be different if he only hit her in her stomach and it could be covered easily, but he hit her other places, theres only so many excuses, and lorelai wuldn't buy any of em, and basicially in my opinion mostly every1 would have noticed, unless you decided to lower every1's IQ in this story, jess would of noticed in the chapter he came into the story and he would of done something, and tristan would hav beat his ass, and not just let her get beat, then hav sex with her later!
it makes no sense!
So i hate your tristan because this is what he does
Watch her get beat, or see her aftermarks,the he fucks her, then he sends her back out to be with ron to get beat again.
Oh and one more thing, Rory would not have slept with tristan! I couldn't even read the last few chapters...because where i was at all that would happen was the people would be oblivious, she would get hit, then he would have sex with her, and then the cycle repeated
The first two chapters when you were talking about tristan watching her get beat, but didn't want to do n e thing because he didn't want to upset her, i thought that was ooc and stupid but i kept reading because i thought that maybe when he got to know her better and stuff he would try and help her, but when i got to about chapter 15 and all he did was sleep with her i gave up hope on this story and decided to leave this review
but i will leave one compliment, the way rory reacted to ron was written well |
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