so in charater, good job!
i like cookies!

Aw. I loved it.

Aww, reading that was just so sweet. Espeically with the last line, this is the kind of story that stay's in one's mind for a while.

You made Luffy really in character, which is pretty hard since he isn't the type that you could easily imagine falling in love. You did great with Nami's POV, giving her really serious input on each of the situations.

The only thing is that her thoughts didn't really have that sort of Nami-accent to them. You know, the kind of thing that someone would read and think 'Yup, that's Nami'.

~ CupidKirby(TwisterKirby)

Nice story, not terribly off the mark in my opinion. While it can debated over and over how Luffy might show his feelings for Nami if he really does have any, this isn't terribly out of character for him.

Great story. By the way, check out some of my own stories when you have the chance. I bet you'll like 'em.

aww so cute ^^ good twist on his innocence so that it doesn't make him stupid ^^

OMG so cuute and sweet !! Really love it ! You explored Luffy's innocent characterization so well !!
Keep this nice work up, Ilove your writing !!

That's so cute! It was a beautiful moment where Luffy's stupidity didn't get in the way! KAWAII!

OMG! That was so good and soo cute! I really loved it! Keep it up!

Animegal9215

definitely..one of a kind..

this was a lovely story u should really add on to it i want to see what happens to them.

OMG! That was so perfect *-*
Great Job! ;D

Oh... the character are so naive (Luffy) makes me want to laugh.

Very nice

I liked it.

Short but sweet ^^ Lol, I didn't think it would have started out with her shaving, but you managed to pull it off ^^ great story

good fic.