   MrSchimpf
2004-09-09 . chapter 1Hee, when I read this I was hoping for the best and dreading the worst (i.e. yet another slog through the Rory/Dean mess). Glad it was the best though, an alternate scene without Glenn the moron ruining the moment between Rory and Paris.
Everything about this was so well done, easing into the scene from the show and then your own dialouge. That was so well done, along with the actions, it's amazing how much you have them both down and their interplay. Rory isn't my strong suit (I'm a Paris writer), but you captured her feelings about the kiss so well. She feels conflicted about things, but in her mind it just seems so right. I loved how you had her go through a roller coaster of emotions through that second kiss from Paris.
I like how you have them both cautious, but wanting to venture towards each other again, along with them trying to deal with four years of conflict and friendship in this simple little scene. Everything about this is so right and don't get me wrong, this is good as a one-shot...I want more. Maybe not from this story, but you in general when it comes to Rory/Paris.
If you're looking for another place to post this, check out the Yahoo group I co-mod, GilmoreGirlsSlash ( http://groups.yahoo.com/group/gilmoregirlsslash ), because I know everyone will love reading this, we don't get enough post-417 fic right now.
Again, great job, great story, and I loved this, I hope you decide to write more in our fandom! |
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