This was a delight to read. So rarely do we get to see Nooj and Paine actually enjoying themselves. Your portrayal of the two of them taking such pleasure in one another is very true to both characters. And I very much like the way you've depicted an afterlife where the greatest risk is boredom.

The use of Auron as the information desk is most excellent.

There are a few places where your characterization of Paine jars a bit, to me; her language and tone are a bit harsh to my ears, especially in the first few chapters, and I have a hard time seeing her taking her life for the reasons you described. Given that, though, overall you did quite well with bringing her- well, not to life, but you know what I mean.

So it's finished u,u sigh... it was good while it lasted, Auron was a nice touch, though! :D suprised Chappu didnt make an apperance, but then again nither Paine OR Nooj know him O_o;

nice :D

I have a feeling that this isn't the end but the chapter ended with a sense of closure. I wonder how much further you plan to take this? Oh, and every time you mention Auron my muse comes grumbling back _

I have been faithfully reading this for so long, and I must say... it's a somewhat inconclusive end. But honestly... the inconclusiveness (inconclusivity? .) fits here. They do have an eternity, and they will experiment, and probably go on to many other adventures in their time together than we have the ability to sit and read about. We certainly don't expect you to write about them for forever - even if we think we might be able to indulge ourselves in your delightful prose for that long - and so, you have given us a conclusive inconclusive end.

Share the secret. Are they able to make life there? And if so... what would a child born of the dead be like?

Well, from our chats you know I am incapable of giving you the well thought out and descriptive review you recieve from your other admirers so I just want to say what a thrill this fic has been. This 'Trifle' as you once called it was entertaining and I'm sorry its ended. Wow, I've seen people treat Baralai harshly, but you pulled it off with finesse. I will continue to sing this fic's praises to anyone who will listen. And Thank you again for all the encouragement on my fic as well. It's greatly appreciated.

The excitement I felt when I found out that this chapter had been posted was overwhelming _ I really wanted to see your portrayal of Auron and let me say I am not disappointed. Of course there was a slight difference in style and in character concept however he was not (by my standards) OOC.

I was quite literally jumping for joy when I first saw that you had referenced Birth of Pain _ It gave my Muse another kick in the butt which is good cause she was trying to sneak off again. Anyway, it really put a smile on my face that an author I respected so much made a reference.

One final comment, the heavenly departments were quite amusing. almost a touch of "hitchhikers guide to the galaxy" in the prose. Now I'm curious, what would your heaven be?

What an informative chapter! It really helped out this dense soul immensely. Thanks.

Ah, I'm so glad that someone else sees the Auron-Paine connection. You put it in there so smoothly that there's no offense that could be taken by anybody to it. I find it amusing that Auron's role now is Official Explainer, since he did oh so much explaining in FFX. In fact, in the game he seemed to be the AntiExplainer, with all he kept from Tidus until the boy badgered it out of him.

Your Yuna struck me as a bit odd - I know she's difficult to write for! - but it seemed she'd care about Paine a little more than she let on here. It seemed, to me, that she was there only because Baralai sent her. She seems to admire Paine a great deal in the game, and cares about her in that friendly sort of way, so... I don't know. Maybe she was just cut off by Paine's rudeness about Baralai.

I did like the end quite a bit. It made me smile.

No! They didn't just...you snuck that in there! That was...wow. I didn't see that coming, I had to go back and read it again just to make sure. Poor Nooj, not being able to make heads or tails of his situation, that's great! And that Baralai, geez can't he take a hint? lol.

Two word: silly and kinky XD

what on Spira have you done to Shuyin and Lenne?

XD XD XD

It was very interesting to see your portrayal of Gippal. I found him to be very in character and could actually imagine him doing the things you described (much as I can with Nooj and Paine but watching you master other characters is interesting as well). Now that Shuyin and Lenne have been put to rest I can't help but wonder where the plot will go from here.

I'm not the brightest crayon in the box, so work with me here. This chapter states that Nooj's children aren't born yet, but in the last chapter they were. Is it maybe because of their lack of ability to tell time? If so then please pardon my stupidity, sometimes it takes a lot for me to finally pick up what you're putting down.

Ah, Ikon, this was a delight! And I don't say that just because you portrayed Gippal perfectly: making him a bit of a dolt, but perfectly and and wonderfully content with that and even using it to his advantage. The charisma was there even in your writing, the way he folded his hands together and the smirk and thumbs up at the end of his appearance. I see how you've turned the smirking bit around on me now... .

As for the rest of the chapter (forgive me if my eyes are blinded by the appearance of the one who so often tells my stories for me), I loved how flawlessly you inserted the delightful act of oral sex in there. It was done so well that after I was done reading it I paused, thought "did they just...?", smirked, and went on. And so tastefully too! Good work. And it does seem that Nooj has lightened up quite a bit; maybe it's a byproduct of getting good sex... well, regularly, so to speak.

Another wonderful bit of work, and I look forward to the next one, as always.

Yes, and by the way: thank you. .

Hurrah! She is finally at peace with this chapter! Well, I certainly hope so. And you're quite welcome, I'm glad I was able to assist you somehow.

Well, Ikon, this certainly was not the best chapter you've outputted in your life... however, it is far from the disgraceful mess that you had led us all to believe. Still, this portion of your larger work is leaps and bounds above anything a mortal human could have come up with. I admire even your self-proclaimed lesser work, and this pales in comparison to what surrounds it. However, everyone needs to have a chapter that they just get out of the way; you brought much light and amusement to this part of the story anyway. I did enjoy it. Your characterization of Lenne is, once again, mind-bogglingly amusing, and though I can't really picture Paine dropping and rolling in a field of flowers, it's still a nice treat to attempt to imagine. Nooj spurting philosophy while naked is also a rare treat - I'm glad you put that in there, however brief it was. All in all, a good job, especially for how impeccably you described its nonexistent terribleness.