For some reason, *this site* is messing up my review. I think it was something to do with the stuff it detetes out of reviews. That's not what I wrote. I'll try and rewite it when I'm less ** off. So annoying. I wrote what comes to about a page in WordPerfect.
The short being: Loved the story.
Sorry about the mess up, I didn't know what it would do.

I'll start with the constructive criticism you asked for.

Oh, drat, I was going to call you on the "Chapter 11" thing, but you got it first. Shucks.

>>The droplets were cold and hard, splashing against his soaked fabric.>...harsh gusts slammed about the forest trees.>Sighing in defeat, the Elf wrapped the cloak tighter,>Other arrows flew back and forth over the wall, seeking a victim.>Coming to the end, he pushed another door up and open. He grabbed the boy...>...Mordor is to the east,’ he thought, ‘But who is commanding them?>Dropping the pouch, he rubbed the thin bands that were braided into a circle.

haha.Good.Continue.

I love it so far very discriptive you should go pro! Im liking this character he is turning out to be awsome. UPDATE! ^^

ADDING TO FAVORITE AUTHOR AND STORY LIST YAY!