You have the skills to be a great writer although this story isn't that great. You're writing the characters not at all like themselves. I think you should work on your writing, but I do think that once you do it will be great.

this is really good my only thing is that Buffy was 17 when she slept with Angel not 16 but other then that good

keep writing!

u can't stop now!

plez!

OH! Not again! I must know what happens!

Mita

What happens?

Mita

this is really good update soon

Good fic, I just have a few tips for you. It's better to use quotation marks when one of your characters speak. It's a little less confusing. And your grammar, punctuation, and spelling need a little help too. May I suggest getting a beta reader? If you didn't know, a beta checks for any mistakes and whatnot before you post your fic. Beta's can also help with story ideas and such. Just ask around, I'm sure someone will beta for you. I don't mean to criticize or anything, I just thought I'd give you some tips. :o)

dude the suspense is killing me please hurry with the chapter i hope its spike

hey good chapter

plaese amke them longer

not fair that's not fair i'm too lazy to log in

Oh don't leave us in suspense! Keep it up and update soon!

Mita

please let spike save her!

please let spike save her!

please let spike save her!

please...

please...

will you?

me

good so far

cant wait for the next chapter, i wish the chapters were longer

r u seriously gonna just leave it like that?

there should b a law against leaving a story in the middle of the climax! keep writing!

um, how does buffy suddenly know so much about magick? i'd like to see what happens in this fic, keep writing, but at first this seemed a little stiff, not so imaginative.