That was a good beginning i hope to see a sequel soon!

The Littlest Dibbun

Still shoirt and where is Dandin?

Mail me, Helena! I haven't spoken to u all summer... I couldn't phone u so I'm trying here..

Now I understand the title

Aside from a small number of spelling and grammatical errors, pretty good. Well written, even with few original characters. I have no idea if this is a good or bad review, decide for yourself! Then again, my own fanfiction is almost 45 pages long printed . . . That i can see is quite a bit! I'll read all the other parts for now . . .

This is horrible. You do not explain enough of who is Blyth.

Better review next time!

good

I think this is the start to a really good story. You could take it anywhere and I think that the second part will be as good as the first.

Well-written, but I'm confused... What happened to Dandin? Did he die? How? If he's alive, why didn't he at least say 'bye? Or is that explained later? Other than that, though, great beginning.

I am a very big fan of Redwall, and even thogh I have not got this far in the series I thought this was very good!I am so glad you made more!

I hope you continue this story, I think it is really good so far.