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Reviews for: Under Immune
Saru Wolfe
2008-07-18 . chapter 1
This is absolutely adorable. I'd quote my favorite part for you, but you'd just end up with your entire story in my review, so I'll leave it be. I love it!
magooglersriot
2008-07-16 . chapter 1
Aw. Cute! Love it! :D
Miss-Jedi
2006-09-13 . chapter 1
Ha!
Adrianna
2005-09-12 . chapter 1
Excellent, Excellent! Very funny! Great job.
ArcherofAlbion
2005-08-07 . chapter 1
Yet another good story with Carth in it, hurray for Carth.
Roach4Life
2005-05-11 . chapter 1
LOL...cute story arrow!
phoq
2005-04-11 . chapter 1
hahaha, very cute :)
I guess even very powerful Jedi can have the flu... lovely idea and well done for the story. Them arguing is always good to read...
Midnight Hawk
2005-03-14 . chapter 1
Aww...a short but sweet story to the lasting love between Carth and Revan. Even with a cold, he still thinks she's great. Made me giggle.
Revan's Pet Duck
2005-02-05 . chapter 1
Heehee... that was certainly amusing. ^^
icey cold
2005-01-13 . chapter 1
Ah, romantic fluffage at its best.

Now there's an interesting concept - a sick Revan. Now reading the title I thought that Carth was going to be playing flyboy nurse for everyone's favorite Sith Lord. But nope, instead the two were provoking each other into hilarity.

I especially liked how the two flipped positions. Carth said she had the flu, Revan denies it, and then Revan is claiming she has some bantha-size influenza and Carth retorts its an itty-bitty cold. It was very effective overall.

Good pacing with the dialogue, easy to read and was quite the chuckler. Nice job, Arrow!
Mip the Happy
2005-01-13 . chapter 1
Aw, this is ever so cute =3 I love how you've made Revan just as frustratingly stubborn as Carth always describes her to be in the game, and the dialogue between them. An enjoyable read ^_^
ottgeekgirl
2004-09-25 . chapter 1
Aside from the aforementioned typos which seem to have been mostly corrected, I think this is a great read. A nice little look into the life of a hero and the man who loves her...and how hard that must be.
Prisoner 24601
2004-09-21 . chapter 1
A nice light read. I really liked the banter between the Revan and Carth. Funny and well done.

I highly encourage you to get a beta reader to clean up some of the punctuation mistakes and homonym problems that distract from your story (for example: lose not loose, rogue not rouge).
xenzen
2004-09-20 . chapter 1
Heh, pretty funny, and damned cute. Your story has a few typos in it, that you probably didn't intend to have, although they do add to the laugh factor. My favorite typo: "every time some rouge squadron wants to kill us!" Made me laugh out loud.
arrow maker
2004-09-19 . chapter 1
lol, cute. :D
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