Hi. Intriguing story so far. It's too bad it's remained incomplete for so long. :(

luvin the story so far..but of course i can guess it stupid kikyou in the cave... hate that women! couldnt it be Kaede..? lol

What was that word? Ah...putrescence. It captures a multitude of impressions all at once. Billiance. As I said in response to the prologue: Characterization: Outstanding. Descriptive language: Superb. My only critique: There were a couple cliche terms that could have been replaced with more creative alternatives. Such as 'kicking and screaming.'

I am not presuming to know everything about writing... I myself am but an ametuer. I am merely offering my opinion.

-Char

WOW! I love the characterization. Dead on so far.. but it does help that the characters are more or less spelled out for you. Still, people get them horribly wrong. I appreciate the fact that there are layers to your characters! And I love that I can get a clear image of setting in my head as well. It's great! I love that the showing outweighs the telling.

In conclusion, I will keep reading.

-Char

the personalities of the inuyasha players are captured so beautifully, it almost makes me want to tear up. absolutely wonderful!

I love the story. I kinda figured that Naraku was twisting them around like he always does, but this trap was quite cleaver. To manipulate a person into making a jail break and meeting them in a seperate room to kill them off is ingenious. Naraku is definitely one of the sneakiest vilians ever.

Oh, Kagome and Inuyasha are so cute, though I love Miroku and Sango the most. I have a thing for the kick ass holy men. Miroku and Nicholas D. Wolfwood (from Trigun) will always be my imaginary babies' daddies. Kenshin and Soujiro were offered the opportunity too but both of them were too oblivious towards my affections. I think it's a swordsmen thing. What can I say, I have a weak spot for beautiful, complex men who know how to fight.

So what do you think about my first not so serious review? Be prepared for more of them. *tehehe*

That was expected. Naraku was just too calm and collected through the whole thing. And if you watch InuYasha relegiously, then you would know that Naraku was a half-demon.

The story is AWSOME so far. Well...Don't leave me hanging! Type your flipping butt off!

*squeals with excitement at the romance of "New Moon"* (yeah I know. longness. deal with it) I love romance. This story is completely flawless so far. I am glad that you didn't rush InuYahsa and Kagome's falling in love. Some writers would have them meet one day then have them humping each other the next. It's just not realistic to fall in love that fast(yeah I know "what demons who can melt arrows with their fingers ARE realistic?" leave me alon. i work with what I got)

Total and complete coolnes! Rock on wit yo bad self!

And I totally got the mini skirt joke with Roy Mustang. He would look hot with no shirt on. Though I am a little mad at him right now because the last new episode aired on Adult Swim, I found out he murdered Winry's parents. That...makes...me...so...mad! HULKIFY!But he is hot. teehee

...HA...ha...*akward cough*

LOVE IT ! The ending was so funny. His sinewy muscles rippled as he pulled his shirt off not knowing someone was watching from behind.

Hehehehehe. I'm bad. You are to funny.

Geez, you just keep blowing me away with this story. Not only is it VERY well-written but it has so much creativity and thought put into it. YOU GO GIRLFRIEND!

Too cool. You have a tremendous skill in writing. You should consider writing something other than fanfiction(although if you stop altogether many people will be sad). You have a great skill. Expand it to it's full potential and never stop writing.

oh.MYA! Can't wait for your next chapter. Post your next chappie soon

i miss this story so much! i just thought i'd finally get around to telling you how much i enjoy it, you know, as a little extra initiative to update.::hint,hint::

update plz i'm on the edge i'm so in need of knowing what is going to happen