Great job, love. I don't normally like fanfictions but that was very good. You did have some typos and grammatical errors, but it was still very well written.

I like this story a little more than the last one. You spelled Slytherins wrong, I just thought I'd let you know, since you asked and all. PLease write more soon.

This is an interesting story. It doesn't seem like a very good way to end a one-shot though.

that is exactly what would happen in a situation like this! good job