it's good, i just didn't catch why their suspisius of this Brad guy.

I just want to say to the people that have flamed this story: a charcter on doesn't have to be exactly like the charcter in JK's story. And if you don't like the idea of Ginny being raped, then DON'T READ THE STORY!! I find it quite idiotic if you do.

And to the author: keep it up, your doing great :) Update soon!

Write more, this seems good

Ginny would not blow Harry of that way, she would at least allow him to finish his sentence.

So all this guy has to say is "Will you go to the dance with me?" and Ginny will say yes? Why the hell would she go with a total stranger?

Ginny is a strong young woman, why is she speaking like a ditzy little girl? "Well heck yeah" and "Oh, oh well that is" are two things Ginny would NEVER say.

"Harry really wanted to go to the dance with you." Hermione said.

"And I turned him down for a total stranger? What's wrong with me?" Ginny asked.

They both turned and stared at the author, who promptly burst into flames and died.

Okay, not bad. I just don't like the thought of Ginny getting raped. She has spunk and she would definately castrade him before letting him ** her. DUH MAN DUH. Only four reviews? Boohh ho. Oh and I just think Gin would give Harry more time. But, whatever

good so far! waitin for the next chapter

-some basic gramatical errors.
-excessive use of the word "like"
-it feels like there are some holes
-could be more descriptive
you must be descriptive if you are trying to tell a story about rape, otherwise it loses all meaning

i mean.. good concept.. but it takes time.. you'll develop more. keep up the trade.

hi , i just read your story and i like it
i hope you do a other one

wow it was cool