Hey, it's me again. And again, you've got a neat idea for a story that doesn't quite come together. There's just too little information. How did a yautja have a son who looks human, exactly? Is this yautja supposed to be "Scar" from AVP? He's dead. The others came and took him back. If he isn't dead, you should maybe explain how he lived.

I hope you don't think I'm picking on you, I just think your stories could be much improved if you took more time and filled in the details more. A story like this really needs to be way more than just one page long.

interesting!