I like it! Your imagery is vivid and captures the fiery passion Tasuki has for protecting those he cares about.

One suggestion for a future Tasuki poem (for whatever it's worth =P), since Suzaku is considering the god of love as well as fire, it'd be interesting to see what could be written about Flame Boy from that angle. ^__^

(Yes, I admit I'm a sucker for romance! ^__~)

Best wishes,
KittyLynne