fuller wouldn't 'kill them' (i know it;s like a saying) for that they were keeping their cover he wouldn't be overly please but he would understand, plus your writing everything like facts, it's pretty annoying, this is fiction it's a story they are written to enjoy reading them not to read script like facts, i mean no ofence really it's just it's makes it far less enjoyable to read when it's stated instead of written to enjoy as a story you've written it like it's a report or something and it isn't as great to read like that.

it's just McQuaid, it doesn't have an s on the end.

i was really dissapointed that you made it so tom didn't like being the mcquaid brothers, that sucked, it was like you were making it a chore for him, plus you seriously need a beta because sorry but you layout is absolutly awful, sorry but true! you should do "..." instead of - because one there is no indicator besides a comma which is just dumb, really and two because it's iritating and confusing, sorry but the layout really is bad, great idea though i hated the tim hating being the mcquaid part, that was horible!

and please don't write it so much like a script because that makes it more like a chore to read it, no offence i really like the idea it's just when stories on fanfiction are written like scripts it's very iritating.

i like it so far but i ope the other chapters will be longer and will it all contain the time of everything because i'm thinking that will get very old very fast and annoying to.

hey where is the last chapter i would like to know how it ends please!thank you

pretty good. update soon. thank you

Another excellent chapter! Can't wait for the last chap! I bet it's gonna be a doozy! Catch ya on the flip side!

Wow. Another great chapter. Catch ya on the flip side!

This is good so far. Can't wait for more. Catch ya on the flip side.

Always good to see the McQuaid Brothers..HA!

Glad you're back. It's coming along nicely & quickly. You've got me hooked. Looking forward to some more soon! Keep those little fingers writing.

ouch. hope its clean stuff. good start, dont give up on it.

I'm looking forward for the next chapter :)

i like! i like a lot. it's very good so far. i can't wait to see what happens next .keep writing!